Chinese people will welcome the 55th National Day two days later,October 1th.In Beijing,the Tian'anmen square is decorated by more than 300,000 pots of flowers,the Chairman Mao's old icon is changed by a new one hanging on the Tian'anmen Building.In Nanjing,sweet-scented osmanthus festival,misty rain culture festival in Mochou Lake,barbecue festival in Gulin Park will be held during the National Day.In Chongqing,more than 2,000 of lights on bridge are renewed to welcome the National Day.During the National Day period,Raising the national falg ceremony,a concert of national music and an exhibition of patriotic films will be held in Hangzhou,Zhejing Province.
Happy National Day!
National Day
It is known to everyone:Oct,1st is our National Day.At this day I went to street and saw something.Now I will tell you!
At 8:00 I got up and went bus station with my mother .O my god there were so many people!With difficult we got up the bus and felt very crowed.The traffic was so bad too!I cost nearly 1 hour that we arrived the center of street.What were worse there were even more people!In my opinion it was not very interesting to come out at this day!Nest time I prefer to stay at home and study!
The night of SThe National Day
hanghai has never appealed to me. City born and city bred, I've got tired of the brightness of neon signs and the grandeur of skyscrapers in Shanghai.
But on this year's National Day, I spent a whole night roaming Nanjing Road and the Bund the symbol of the modern material Shanghai, with my roommates. It's the first time that I went out with them. With the huge amount of tourists, we could only wander with the cluster of people, having no destination. In the crowd, we entertained ourselves singing, joking and chatting, leaving all the worries, pressures and unhappiness behind,until mid night. Tired as we were, we still felt very happy. My roommates were quite impressed by the beauty, prosperity and the liveliness of Shanghai. But for me, all these were none of my business. What I treasured was the time I shared with them though that night Shanghai was so charming that she seemed to be one of the leading cities in the world.
It was the friendship that made the night of National Day especially enjoyable and memorable. Because I know that after a few years, my roommates and I may spread out across the world. But I think, that night, we had stockpiled memories like firewood, knowing that, one day, we would gather to relight the blaze of our friendship at the same place.
簡 評(píng)
這篇作文構(gòu)思很巧妙，在文章開頭就宣布自己對(duì)上海的繁華已經(jīng)熟視無睹，并進(jìn)而將繁華的物質(zhì)世界和與朋友共度的歡樂時(shí)光進(jìn)行了對(duì)比，更加鮮明地反襯出友誼的可貴。
這篇二百多字的作文實(shí)在不能算長，但寫得很精致，頗得傳統(tǒng)上海人“螺螄殼里做道場”的真?zhèn)鳌Ｗ髡叩那苍~造句都很考究，grandeur，liveliness，“stockpile等詞匯的使用準(zhǔn)確而生動(dòng)，銜接手段的充分使用使得文氣連貫而整齊，文中語法和搭配錯(cuò)誤也極少。作者在文章末尾的比喻更是給讀者留下了深刻的印象，將記憶比作柴火，將友誼比作火焰，明喻和暗喻的有機(jī)結(jié)合，值得再三回味。
當(dāng)然，第二段的最后一句將讓步狀語從句放在后面，根據(jù)英語中“句末重心”(end-focus)的原則，該句就強(qiáng)調(diào)了上海大都市的魅力而不是同學(xué)友誼，這就背離了作者的初衷，因此建議將該從句調(diào)至句首。
